Last time I had haircut
It
was Sunday afternoon, and my AP literature class was over. I had to go back to the
school because it was the final day of the winter vacation. Because of SAT-urday
test that I had to finish, I had no time to cut my hair. Jagged hair made me looked
like Jean Valjean; not an image of Hugh Jackman but an image of a vagabond. So I
and my mother both agreed to go to a beauty parlor someday after the test, and last
day of vacation was that day.
I
wish I had a haircut in a place where I usually go and have my haircut. But it
was total waste of time go back to my house and have a haircut and go to my
school in The Kingdom of Far Far Away. Fortunately, there was beauty parlor on
the same floor that I was in. The place looked really luxurious and modern that
was really out of my league. The usual repertoire of the hairdresser “What did
you have in mind?” was so much of a burden to me in that place. “Just… neat… as
you will…?” was my stupid timid answer.
The
next tool the hairdresser picked up was something that I didn’t expect:
electric clipper. My intuition warned me, but I tried to convince myself that I’m
watching Michelangelo carving Davide di Donatello. I refrained myself from
asking “Can you really make my hair look good with that?” After two hours of making
the masterpiece, there was a military guy in front of me. He looked sincere,
but little sad. I don’t know if the hairdresser recognized my feeling, he kept
carving my hair. I tried my best until then to respect him, not to say “I don’t
like it”. It was really hard, however. The fact that it took an hour and a half
to have this kind of result was something that I could not withstand. “Can you
please finish your sculpting?”, I clearly remember the hairdresser’s baffled
face. I just wore my cap right after the haircut.
I
was like an angry bull until I went back to the car. I put my cap off and tried
to make my hair look good. Because I felt so shameful that I was angry for just
a haircut, I pretended to be angry about it. As time passed, however, feeling
of uneasiness about my life first time being rude in the beauty parlor which
would have been really a pierce remark for my dear Michelangelo kept hover
inside my mind. Even right now, writing this rite of conciliation, I feel sorry
for him. I should have been more prudent. At that time, I tried to respect him
and the way to respect him was not to say “I don’t like the way you cut my hair”
And just sit quietly. Now, I knew my way of respecting him was wrong, which
clearly offended both him and me. Now I know that silence and restraining
myself from expressing my inner feeling to others are clearly not a way to
respect them.
I
always hesitate about giving personal remarks to other people because I respect
their feeling, and thought I was the one who truly is respecting others. This
was, however, the one incident really made me felt lethargic about my immatureness.
Though it might look little over-interpreting the situation, for me, it once
again made me to contemplate about my way of respecting other people.

I really enjoyed reading the essay, and could definitely sympathize with you. It was very appealing to the eye, but nonetheless I received quite an insight to your personality. If I were to make a criticism I would have to say that your grammar is a bit off and that there were many awkward phrases. All in all, however, this was a very good essay.
ReplyDeleteNice work. This could easily be a college essay, and I like that it's about something as simple as a haircut. You sell yourself with some creative insights and a nice bright tone. This is a true example of an essay that replaces big dramatic plots with writing style and tone.
ReplyDeleteTheme could be more pronounced. Some extra details could be cut down. Humor and wit could be increased. And of course what Dennis says above. All in all, good start to the semester.